Weak Beginnings of Sentences

Consider the following sentences. How can they can be revised so that their messages become clearer and stronger?

It is important to floss every day for dental health.

It is imperative that you wear your seat belt.

The purpose of this chapter is to address the foundational aspects of rock climbing, serving as an introduction to the rest of this book.

There are several stores open.

Toward the end of the chapter, there are five practice plans of various lengths that might serve as models or guidelines.

The intent of this article is to inspire physical educators to reflect on their individual practices and to investigate ways to implement differentiation strategies in a learning environment that is not "one size fits all."

There are certain characteristics that tend to be shared by successful lacrosse players across various levels of the sport.


All of those sentences have something in common: They have wimpy beginnings. And often wimpiness involves too many words. The phrases There is and There are are unnecessarily wordy constructions in which the message is weakened. Here are easy revisions:

Several stores are open.

Toward the end of the chapter are five practice plans of various lengths that might serve as models or guidelines.

Certain characteristics tend to be shared by successful lacrosse players across various levels of the sport.


The phrases It is important that and It is imperative to and others like these can be changed to simple commands so that the message is strengthened:

Floss every day for dental health.

You must wear your seat belt.


And we all remember the papers we used to write in junior high and high school. They often started with a purpose statement: The purpose of this article is or The intent of this chapter is. There's no reason for any adult, especially a published author, to write like that anymore. Here are revisions that make a more prominent statement:

This chapter addresses the foundational aspects of rock climbing, serving as an introduction to the rest of this book.

This article will inspire physical educators to reflect on their individual practices and investigate ways to implement differentiation strategies in a learning environment that is not "one size fits all."